The Internet Millionaire's Copilot
- Author:
- Leslie Dow
- Category:
- Contemporary Romance
Summary
Rebecca Jones, a socialite and Relief Corp pilot returns home to save her uncle’s charter jet service only to fall for Nick Miller, the man who could destroy her family’s business.
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Chapter One
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Rebecca is stunned when she first sees her Uncle’s best customer, Nick Miller, who reminds her of a cross between the bad-boy men she worked with as a relief pilot and the entitled boys of her socialite past.
About Leslie Dow
My friends say I discovered DNA, cured cancer (all kinds) and then sequenced the Human Genome. They’re pleasantly deluded and like to have people buy them martinis in trendy bars. Actually, I help businesses make better stuff and I write! See Leslie’s full profile
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Henza R. Mazengo
Sunday 09 October, 2011, 11:00 PM
The chapter has a great flow of events. Nice going!
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Jo Fereday
Saturday 24 September, 2011, 11:04 PM
I LOVE your voice. The writing is descriptive, yet easy to read, and I've only read one story where the woman is a pilot, and she wasn't half as interesting as your character (so fresh too). The relationship between niece and uncle is nicely defined. I would read this book and enjoy it, but my only comment is that I could put it down now and turn out the light/make a cup of tea, etc. The hook into the next chapter isn't strong enough to MAKE me keep reading (although I would the next day/with a cup of tea in hand!) I need that extra sense of conflict or where the story is going that Kamy is talking about to propel me into chapter 2. Other than that, a lovely job and definitely better than your current 57%.
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Kamy Chetty
Saturday 24 September, 2011, 8:09 AM
Hi Leslie
I enjoyed reading this chapter. I would have loved to see a little more conflict and have a little more of a sense as to where this story was going but I thought your voice was really good and I think that if you add some dialogue and introduce conflict to up the pace you would have a great story.
All the best with your entry
Kamy
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