The Billionaire’s Game of Love
- Author:
- tammy johnson
- Category:
- Passion
- Mentor:
- Lynn Raye Harris
Summary
Billionaire Lucas Mercer has a perfect plan of ultimate revenge. Only one thing stands in his way - his own heart. A tired pawn in her father's games, heiress Regan Belleck is determined to prove revenge is never as sweet as love.
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Chapter One
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A game had set them on their path and only a game would end it. Billionaire Lucas Mercer has a perfect plan of revenge. Heiress Regan Belleck will do anything to prove revenge often costs more than even the hardest heart is willing to pay.
Chapter Two
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Six years of ruthless planning have gone into this moment. Lucas Mercer will have his revenge. But spunky heiress, Regan Belleck isn't quite the timid lamb he'd once pegged her for. The game is on. But will it be a game of revenge - or of love?
About tammy johnson
Strong, alpha males and the equally strong and feisty women who challenge them excite me. As a single, homeschooling and work at home mom, writing is my passion and dream. I enjoy sharing and hope you enjoy reading. See tammy’s full profile
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tammy johnson
Wednesday 26 October, 2011, 7:06 PM
Thank you so much Ella!
Thank you for all the votes and comments! Much appreciated!
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Eliana Robinson
Wednesday 26 October, 2011, 4:53 PM
Hi, Tammy
Wow Its incredible this late in the game for me to read something that isn’t fancy in its wording but still achieve the immaculate smooth and oh-so-deliciously-sweet word flow. Each one just flowed into the other and made the picture being created on my head a lot more smoothly. Bit like an old crackly film vs A DVD, things are smoother and just seem to read better.
All the Best
Ella
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Allyson Armstrong
Tuesday 25 October, 2011, 10:31 AM
Tammy
Nobody's sent me hate mail or given me the smack-down: this is a genuine re-review.
Your story kept me awake because I kept thinking: why don't I get it? Especially with so many positive comments? First off I will say despite my own previously about the twins, I have no problems with the device itself.
And I can see now why the other twin wouldn't be around.
Your writing is excellent, the plot is a little hairy for me but stranger things have happened so I can suspend disbelief.
I think I've put my finger on it and it's a subconscious thing. Your sentences don't seem to meld. I suspect it's something to do with your limited use of contractions, but I'd hate to think such a small thing could make the all the difference. But they just seem a little robotic.
It feels as if you've concentrated on perfect style to the loss of something more gritty between these two. That said, IMHO Lucas is standing his own against other heros. The heroine just seems a bit too contained considering her personal sacrifices - now and in the past.
Your Chapter Two made a lot easier reading for me but I expected to see the same kind of passion that's blazing off the pages in Beguiling the Enemy, Return to Heartbreak Hotel and at least five others here. I'm even feeling more between the couple in Good Morning Ghostly Plane - and that hero is in a coma...
I know comparisons are odious but there's already been 1090 of them in this competition. I only use these examples from a reader perspective on what translates as - or even hints at - passion in my mind.
I hope you won't let my single opinion bother you - I've picked publshed books off the shelves that weren't as well written as this.
I forgot to wish you good luck in the next stage. But I really hope that if you go through, you loosen up your style - and particularly your heroine - a bit more. You've clearly got the skill to do so. Best of luck.
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