Girl On A Mission
- Author:
- Lizzie Barclay
- Category:
- Contemporary Romance
- Mentor:
- Sharon Kendrick
Summary
Betsy Moon is afraid of nothing and no-one and never backs down from a dare. She doesn’t think twice about going up against her sick father’s long-time adversary to get back what is rightfully his.
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Chapter One
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When an old family feud raises its ugly head, Jack Bannister decides it time to end it once and for all.
Chapter Two
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Betsy struggles to stand her ground as Jack gets tough. Jack discovers far more about Betsy than he wants to know.
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Kathryn Neale
Saturday 29 October, 2011, 11:37 AM
Lizzie, thanks so much for those comments. I thought you'd be in full recovery position! What an effort Round Two must have been! So well done for getting so far! And are you finishing the story?
I'm going to keep going with mine, despite the fact I can see HUGE holes in it LOL. All that introspective info dump, too much info too soon, motivation, characterisation, etc etc. Lots of stuff, in fact, that became glaringly obvious with Shirley's fabby class. I've learned so much in such a short time, haven't you? And yep, definitely see you in that November class! Kathryn
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Eliana Robinson
Wednesday 26 October, 2011, 4:10 PM
Hi Lizzie,
Cool entrusting start to the story, smooth wording, I like the RomeoJuliet type theme and the very much modernized version.
All the Best
Ella
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Veronica Parin
Wednesday 26 October, 2011, 10:40 AM
Lizzie. Good Luck today. Regardless of the outcome, I'm sure you'll persevere and succeed. :)
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